⓵ 주제문 -> If I were given money as a gift and had a choice between buying a piece of jewelry
that I like or tickets to a concert that I want to attend, I would most likely choose the concert tickets.
⓶ 뒷받침 문장 1 -> Most of all, a piece of jewelry can be pretty and I feel good when I wear it, but
music is a lifelong interest that I will continue to have throughout my life.
⓷ 뒷받침 문장 2 -> In addition, not only would I enjoy going to a concert with the money I receive as a gift,
but my friends would also enjoy attending the concert with me.
⓸ 마무리 문장 -> To sum up, while having a new piece of jewelry is nice, I would prefer to buy tickets for a concert
if I were given money as a gift.